This is my first try at a mystery/suspense. What do you think?
She left the ballroom to find a little room to herself. She was feeling very claustrophobic is the huge ballroom. The corset was tight on her and made every breath even harder to take. She strolled slowly down the long corridor. The first room she opened was filled with a lot of men. She shut the door quickly and wanders further down the empty hall.
The last door on the left opened as if by its own accord. Feeling extremely on edge, she peeked around the open door. The room was empty. Not really thinking, she enters the room with baby steps. As she enters the room completely, she sees a looking glass that shows her completely from head to toe.
Her long, fire red hair is pulled into a lose bun. The ivory gown touches the floor so you cannot see the pearl whiteness of her legs. Her sapphire colored eyes blink as she looks behind her reflection. Was that a man she just passing through the doorway. She turns her head. There’s nobody standing there.
The young woman turns to face the looking glass once again. She sees a stain at the bottom of her dress. “Where did that come from,” she wonders to herself. As she looks down at the stain, a movement in the corner catches her eyes.
She turns around to look at the corner. On the near the door, there is some kind of fluid. She walks towards the fluid on the floor. The light from the hall luminates the bright red color. She sees a small movement behind the door. She screams as another woman falls towards her and lands on the floor. The knife in her heart a sure sign that she was dead. The young woman, Gabrielle, faints dead to the floor.
To be continued…….